Liza Rutten
Saturday, August 13, 2011
Is this a good beginning to my story?
It's good, I really like it. The only problem I have with it is that you say, "Perspiration dribbled down my forehead..." It would be a lot better to just say sweat. You'll make your character seem more human by doing that.
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